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Account Closed at 16:12 on 26 October 2006
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Who?
<Added>
Oh sorry, I thought you were talking about me.
I liked this. Very evocative, strong imagery, avoided the passive voice, firm POV, no obvious errors of diction or syntax.
On the minus side, I would have liked a more sparing use of repetition. Although to be fair, the repetition did give the piece an agreeable chiming quality. Almost poetic.
I could be wrong, but is it meant to be read in iambic pentameter? If so, I really think there should be a full stop after the tenth 'me'.
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Cholero at 17:07 on 26 October 2006
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Beadle
Why, now that you mention it... it does ring a bell. Can't quite get the name. Tip of the tongue...
Nope!
It's gone. Damn.
Have I mentioned the piece I'm writing about a strutting buffoon?
Pete
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Beadle at 19:39 on 26 October 2006
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Lisa
It's not iambic, I was christened a Catholic. I agonsied over no.s 28, 427 and 2017. No. 469 was translated from the Hebrew, so some of its impact may have been lost.
Trying reading it backwards.
Nik
This work is regularly recited on the streets of London, Manchester, New York and Godalming amongst others. I am also currently undertaking legal proceedings against Paxman for copying the piece in its entirety and basing his career on it. Cheap.
Pete
Yes, I thought the strutting buffoon was follow-up to Every Which Way But Loose with Clint Eastwood and that monkey. No? Keep it real.
Me
PS Lisa, it's TI, in case you're wondering.
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