Not Knowing the Time
Posted: 08 October 2006 Word Count: 177 Summary: This is an old one, written when I could still cycle a few miles!
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Not Knowing the Time
And first I put a little air in the tyres, and almost without thought took off my watch. And then the October air, and the joy of balance.
And a nod to a person I knew, who was going somewhere, and a word to a person I knew, who carried a paper and looked at his watch, and walked at the green man's bidding.
I rested the bike on a verge, and lay in the shade, in the midst of the grass, the dusty delicate heads, a long time looking upwards and lying still.
A long time looking upwards and lying still. The airy foliage, the dry October leaves, trembled and spun against a moving sky.
And then I turned over, to see the world under the grass: the empty spiderways, the tortuous streets and plazas. A solitary motion there, the last of the summer crowd.
A long time lying still and living in the grass, like a mouse or deer on the sea-floor, or bright fish drifting and steering among the crowns.
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joanie at 17:47 on 08 October 2006
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James, simply reading this relaxes me and takes me off with you on that bike ride! I just love the opening 'and's and the repetitions, especially the halfway point. Taking off your watch despite yourself is wonderful - I wish I had the courage to do it!
Just deliciously calm until the last two lines, which have had me returning a few times already.
Lovely.
joanie
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Elsie at 19:33 on 09 October 2006
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Hi James
I was wondering if this was a traditional form because of the repeated lines, but I can’t think what it would be.
I really like the 2nd line, that sets up the whole poem. The 5th stanza is lovely, reminds me of being a child, staring into the grass, and imaging being tiny, like “The borrowers’ – so I particularly liked the idea of:
the empty spiderways, the tortuous streets and plazas.
A solitary motion there, the last of the summer crowd.
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In the last stanza I like the way you express being out of place and wondering at the different world around you, but I was puzzled by the ‘crowns’ – is that crowns as in headwear of royalty (which makes an interesting image) or some other kind of crown – do you get crowns of garlic, grass etc?
One other thing that puzzled me – the man with the paper and the watch – who walked at the green man’s bidding. Ah – I think I get it as I’m typing – it’s not the green man in the woods – it’s The Green Man pub.
I enjoyed reading this.
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joanie at 20:51 on 09 October 2006
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Elsie, I assumed the green man was the pelican crossing.
Joan
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Elsie at 21:32 on 09 October 2006
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Ah - but.. he's checking his watch, (for opening time) and has a newspaper... though on the other hand on the subject of cycling - a road sign may be more appropriate. Only James can tell us what was in his head! (Though now I think you're probably right...)
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James Graham at 19:17 on 10 October 2006
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Elsie, I think you can talk about crowns of garlic or grass, but most important for this poem, trees have crowns. It's a weird image, the fish and animals put into the wrong elements - but you were spot on in saying it's meant to express a feeling of being out of place, 'living in the grass', in a strange environment.
Yes, it's the wee green man at the traffic lights. Probably if it had been opening time at the Green Man pub I would have parked the bike and gone in, instead of communing with nature.
Thanks Elsie, and Joanie too, I'm pleased you enjoyed this.
James.
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NinaLara at 07:31 on 12 October 2006
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Hi James -
sorry to have been away from the board this week!
I like the sense the you are sinking further into nature and further into imagination. I can spend hours looking at moss becuase it seems like a rainforest in miniature - so I am with you here!
The only phrase that worries me is 'joy of balance'. I don't know why .... perhaps it sounds a little like a victorian gentleman on a pennyfarthing. Could it be 'enjoying balance'?
Thank James!
Nina
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hailfabio at 11:06 on 26 October 2006
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Great work James.
Having just purchased a bicycle i can really relate to this.
Love the repeated lines.
Stephen
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James Graham at 18:56 on 26 October 2006
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Thanks, Stephen, glad you liked this poem.
Nina, 'the joy of balance' does seem a bit pretentious. I can't think of a substitute right away but something will pop up sooner or later. Thanks for your comment.
James.
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