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Improvement

by hailfabio 

Posted: 18 September 2006
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Inbetween
my toes, the space is
expanding.






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Beanie Baby at 11:37 on 18 September 2006  Report this post
Hmm - had to think about this one because I wasn't sure whether or not it really is about toes, or if it's something much, much deeper.It conjured up an image of a child pressing his feet into the damp sand and looking to see the imprint afterwards. I love poems that make you think - and this one certainly does that!
Best wishes,
Beanie.
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joanie at 17:26 on 18 September 2006  Report this post
Hi Stephen. Yes, this made me think too. I laughed aloud at first but I'm not sure why! I get the impression that this is much more to do with 'finding your feet' than just toes.

Very thought-provoking!

joanie
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Account Closed at 07:44 on 29 September 2006  Report this post
As others have said, it's one that's apparently simple but makes you think - great stuff! But isn't it "in between"???

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A
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smudger at 09:24 on 10 October 2006  Report this post
Hmmm, highly enigmatic. I imagined standing in a stream with water flowing between my toes. What were you really driving at here?
Tony
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