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New Age
Posted: 14 September 2006
Word Count: 41
Summary: Just me being cynical.
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typeitinwithnospaces
unless
you want to get frustrated
because
your request
isinvalid
password
username
whateverhappenedto
"What name is it?"
"Thank you so much!"
Despite the creepy undertones,
just occasionally
just when I'm down,
I want to be called 'Madame'
or even 'Love'
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 NinaLara at 22:06 on 14 September 2006
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I really enjoyed the sentiment expressed here Joanie! I also like the run together words and the idea that 'password' and 'username' have replaced 'madame' and 'love'. Yearning for a human world ....
I Imagine you could do a lot more with this if we were allowed indents and graphics!
Nina
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 joanie at 22:08 on 14 September 2006
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Oh, wow, Nina - that was quick! Yes, we need MORE indents and formats here! Thanks for your swift response.
joanie
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On a much more serious note - my lovely, lovely, Dad, who was the most beautiful person, and who used to call every woman 'Love', would have been mortified if he thought that anyone had been offended by that.
I could get very upset if I thought too much how the world is turning....!
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 James Graham at 09:43 on 16 September 2006
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Not only the runtogether words - your spaces between lines are like breathing spaces, time to think, time to make eye-contact. The non-spaced lines are the computer 'talking', the spaced lines are you talking to us.
All these ill-mannered internet messages must be written by somebody; why do they have to make them so peremptory? They must think this is how a machine would express itself. Instead, a typical error message should read something like: 'So sorry. You made a mistake when you entered your password. I do understand your difficulty because your password has to be a nonsense word with asterisks and numbers as well as letters to avoid indentity theft - which is supposed to be a threat but is probably exaggerated - but please be patient and try again. Thank you so much.'
Madame, you have made no error in posting this poem.
James.
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Souchong at 16:45 on 24 September 2006
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hi joanie, i like this a lot. as others have pointed out, the structure reinforces the content really well. it's a nice piece of social commentary which triggers all kinds of wonderings and rememberings and thoughts about regional usage. wonderful stuff. thank you. souchong
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