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Religion? Or Sadism?
Posted: 28 August 2006
Word Count: 122
Summary: May offend......
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Religion? Or Sadism?
“Inshallah!”
You smugly screech
at the dying, innocent
victims of your sickness
If Allah wills it
Allah is your illness
the venom in your veins
vicious cancer in your mind
Your hypocrisy
laughably transparent!
Backward foolish extremists
will suffer in the end
You are not martyrs
but pathetic naïve fools.
Like sheep you follow.
You are lambs to the slaughter!
Your own slaughter!
Suicide bombs for Islam?
Or for terrorist leaders
of mind control and evil?
Do you seriously believe,
paradise appears in the form
of a flesh splattering explosion,
on a bus or a plane ?
The trails of bloody destruction
the suffering in our world
nearly always lead to your door!
Your morals reek of pure filth.
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 James Graham at 19:22 on 29 August 2006
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Hi Lisa - Protest poems can sometimes be written in quite a detached way, but I sense real anger in this. I wonder if any particular terrorist act was uppermost in your mind as you wrote it? Maybe it was the very thought of all those planes that were to have been blown up over the Atlantic.
There's always someone who is offended by a protest poem, and I'm sure this is no exception. But surely most readers would share your anger. Especially since (this is how I read the poem) your anger seems to be directed not so much against the suicide bombers themselves, as against the way they are poisoned by ideology and used by extremist leaders. You seem to be giving these young men a good telling off for allowing themselves to be used. Is that how you meant to portray them...as less to blame than the leaders they follow?
The only lines that I found I couldn't accept in the same way as I could accept the rest of the poem were 'The suffering in our world/ always leads to your door!' Well, not always. I'm not thinking about suffering caused by natural disasters, that's a different thing. I mean suffering inflicted on innocent people supposedly to further an ideology. There's no shortage of non-Muslim murderers of innocent people.
If I'm right, and you do see the suicide bombers as - to some extent at least - victims, maybe you could qualify what you say in the last verse...including the last line?
James.
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 NinaLara at 19:46 on 03 September 2006
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Dear Lisa -
I really admire you for writing this because, as James has said, there is a real passion in what you are saying. It is a difficult poem for me to comment on because I don't agree with a lot of what you are saying - not because I think terrorism is a good think but because I think the world is weighted very much in favour of the West. In fact, I appeal to your passion (which appears in the few poems of yours that I have read) to write a poem about youth and alienation as a companion to the above poem.
As a poem - a set of well chosen words - I think this works.
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Ambitions of Lisa at 12:30 on 15 November 2006
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Hi James and Ninalara
Thank you both for your comments. I agree that it was written with a lot of passion and anger.
James, yes I was trying to portray the bombers as people who have been misled and brainwashed, rather like victims themselves. Victims of the extremist leaders.
It wasn't really one particular terrorist act which prompted me to write this, although it was written at around the time of an incident in Turkey.
It just seems that this issue is always reported on the news programmes on a daily basis these days and my anger has been building over some time. It does get frustrating to see the horrendous acts continuously threatening our lifestyle and culture.
Glad this piece works and comes across in the way I had hoped :)
Lis
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