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Youth

by RobStowell 

Posted: 18 August 2006
Word Count: 60
Summary: 55 word flash fiction
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55 Word Flash Fiction
Youth
A scruffy hut had appeared in the tree into which my sweetheart and I had once carved our love and, worse, her name had been crudely scraped away. Aghast, I climbed up and peered within.
It was full of sullen teenagers, one of whom spat cola into my face and said, "Welcome to Youngsville, Granddad."






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MarkT at 08:54 on 20 August 2006  Report this post
young people eh.... ;)

Short and to the point! nice one.

mark
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tiger_bright at 09:09 on 20 August 2006  Report this post
Ouch! Stinging stuff, Rob. I hope you'll consider taking out full membership here - I couldn't recommend it too highly for the difference it's made to my motivation and confidence.

All the best

Tiger
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Prospero at 09:28 on 20 August 2006  Report this post
Hi Rob

Got a chain-saw. Aged guile beats youthful exuberance every time. Alternatively you could chuck a crate of brown ale at 'em.

I'm with Tiger, if Flash is your thing sign-up. Best 35 quids worth I have ever had.

Best

Prosp
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crowspark at 19:36 on 20 August 2006  Report this post
Hi Rob.

Not so welcoming then!

Nice tight flash at 55 words. I wonder which of the blaggards had defaced the sweethearts name?

Welcome to Flash Fiction I Rob!

Bill
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Jumbo at 08:45 on 23 August 2006  Report this post
Nice one Rob!
Scenario and resolution all in a tight 55 words.

And I'm with the others - chop the tree down - just above the carved initials!!

I look forward to reading more of your work.

All the best

john
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choille at 10:45 on 26 August 2006  Report this post
Hi Rob,

Great tight flash. Liked the spitting of cola.
Join up and share more.

All the best
Caroline
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Katy Kat at 18:05 on 27 August 2006  Report this post
Hi Rob
Great story in 55! Look forward to reading more from you!

Best wishes
Katy Kat
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