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GRAVITY KIDS

by thefourthalien 

Posted: 31 March 2003
Word Count: 497
Summary: HERE IS THE OPENING SCENE OF MY PROPOSED CHILDRENS ADVENTURE CARTOON SERIES 'GRAVITY KIDS' - ABOUT KIDS WITH DEVICES THAT ALLOW THEM TO DEFY GRAVITY. (note: The back story of how these devices came about, and why only kids can use them, is contained in the rest of the pilot script. If you are interested in investing in this project please get in touch!


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THE FOLLOWING CONCEPT/CHARACTERS/EXTRACT ARE REGISTERED WITH THE WRITERS GUILD OF AMERICA.


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COLD OPEN

FADE IN:

EXT. OPEN SKY - DAY

A DC-9 passenger jet is winging its way home, sun
glinting off the metal.

CUT TO:

INT. DC-9 - DAY

Only about forty of the hundred seats are occupied.
There are MEN, WOMEN, a few CHILDREN -- a real cross-
section of society. Some read, others doze.

CUT TO:

INT. COCKPIT - SAME TIME

The CAPTAIN, FIRST OFFICER, and FLIGHT ENGINEER relax,
letting the autopilot do the work.

A female FLIGHT ATTENDANT enters with a tray of coffee.

FLIGHT ATTENDANT

Coffee for the flyboys!

Suddenly the plane bucks. Coffee cups topples.

FIRST OFFICER

(SCANNING CONTROLS)

What's happened?


FLIGHT ENGINEER

Not sure yet...

The Captain wrestles with the joystick.

CAPTAIN

Flaps aren't responding.

CUT TO:

EXT. DC-9 - SAME TIME

The plane is losing control, swaying in the air. The
elevator flaps on the T-shaped tail CREAK, not working
properly.

CUT BACK TO:

INT. DC-9

The passengers know something is wrong. One MALE
PASSENGER grabs FLIGHT ATTENDANT #2 by the elbow as she
passes.

MALE PASSENGER

What's going on?

FLIGHT ATTENDANT #2

I'm sure it's just turbulence --

The man starts to get out of his seat...

FLIGHT ATTENDANT #2

Please, sir, if you could just remain in

your seat.

CUT TO:

EXT. DC-9

The plane takes a sudden dive!

CUT TO:

INT. DC-9

Pandemonium -- passengers SCREAM. Attendants fall.

CUT TO:

INT. COCKPIT

The crew try desperately to level the plane. The
altimeter goes wild.

CUT TO:

INT. DC-9

A 10-year-old boy (RICKY) furiously rummages through
his traveling bag. He takes out an octagonal device
with a crystal embedded at the center. He wrestles the
device's X-shaped straps over his shoulders so that the
device is flat against his chest. Some passengers perk
up with hope upon seeing the device -- they know it
well.

Despite the fact that the plane is at a harsh angle,
plunging toward ground like a rocket, the boy manges to
brace himself in the aisle. The boy concentrates. The
crystal at the device's center GLOWS WHITE.

EXT. DC-9

The plane begins to right itself, but is still falling,
and is very near ground. Below is a vast field, rushing
at them at breakneck speed.

INT. DC-9

The boy's entire chest seems to be afire with the glow
that is emanating from the device on his chest. His
brow is beaded with sweat from the concentration. The
passengers are less panicky now though their faces still
register great fear.

CUT TO:

EXT. DC-9

The planes slows in its descent until --

It is literally hovering only two feet from the ground!

CUT TO:

INT. DC-9

The passengers are signing with relief as the boy slowly
opens his eyes. He glances outside and allows himself a
little smile. He stands at a different angle, arms out,
and concentrates again, though this time he only appears
to be meditating.

CUT TO:

EXT. DC-9 - DAY

The plane slowly descends on to its belly.

CUT TO:

INT. DC-9

The passengers applaud the boy. His mother hugs him.
Then the Captain approaches the lad, and shakes his
hand.

CAPTAIN

Thank goodness we had a Gravity Kid on
board!


END OF COLD OPEN






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Jibunnessa at 08:29 on 04 April 2003  Report this post
I'm glad that there was a gravity kid on board. But, what's the back story? Why do they have these devices? If it's the gadgets that are special rather than the kids themselves, then why doesn't everyone have them? Were they chosen by some sort of mentor figure and grouped together because of their special qualities?

Are we later going to see the US govt trying to kidnap these kids to steal the secret of their gadgets? Or may be enemy agents trying to get their hands on them. After all the kids don't seem to be in disguise. So, what stops them from just disappearing into somebody's hands?

thefourthalien at 14:51 on 04 April 2003  Report this post
The excerpt of Gravity Kids is only the opening scene that 'grabs' the audience. All the backstory etc is then laid out in the scenes that follow. (This is a half hour pilot).

I will tell you that the devices that the kids wear can only be used by kids, and adults have great difficulty trying to use them. This is because there has to be no doubt in the wearer's mind -- something which adults have considerable trouble with!

Jibunnessa at 12:55 on 06 April 2003  Report this post
Ok, could be fun. Do all the Gravity Kids have the same device that work in the same way? Or perhaps if mind is an important player in working with the devices, then perhaps the way the device behaves in the 'hands' of each kid is slightly different? Also, what if some underaged thugs stole one of the devices, could they also defy gravity? And would you need human language. What if someone's cat for example managed to get it's head through the straps, could the device be accidentally activated by cat thought processes? Or does everything have to be in English?

Lots of fun and interesting possibilities :)

Send us some more!

mrjamesy at 22:31 on 22 August 2003  Report this post
I laughed out load when I got the final line. I hope that as the reaction you wanted to achieve? Is it a cold opening for a sit-com style program? Is it going to be a comedy?

thefourthalien at 02:15 on 23 August 2003  Report this post
It is a kids show, as it says. It is a mixture of comedy and adventure

CODE ASH at 12:10 on 27 December 2003  Report this post

This sounds promising, but I think you need to tune the starting sequence a bit as it seems a little heavy for children. However, overall I like how you have written it, very exciting and sharp. Good luck with it!


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