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Just Once More

by Zettel 

Posted: 13 July 2006
Word Count: 144

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Just Once More

Her quickening breath
brushes my cheek
and I breathe her in
from her inner self
deep into mine
Her head finds again
its long-surrendered place
cradled in my neck
Her shining sweet-breathed hair
cushions my lips
and the changeless smell of her
suffuses my sense
Memory languidly uncoils
opening its heart-ached arms
to the returning gift of her
Her cheek burrows deeper
into the safeness of me
A sigh escapes her doubts
whispering I am home I am home
at last
Each part of us
embraces its intended mate
In long-cold ash-grey embers
rekindled warmth stirs
a once consuming fire
and sparks fly within
the smoketrails of remembrance
Her life-worn hands
gather me further into her
As she raises
doubt-surrendered eyes to mine
all thought reserve and guilty fear
fall away
Here now we are we must
we shall…. be one

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joanie at 18:13 on 16 July 2006  Report this post
Hi Zettel. This is lovely; the warmth and sensuousness (is that a word?) wash over the reader. There are lots of phrases/sentences where something inanimate is the subject of the verb: 'Her quickening breath/brushes my cheek', 'the changeless smell of her/suffuses my sense', 'A sigh escapes her doubts', etc., etc., etc! Why does this work so well for this type of poem? Perhaps someone more knowledgeable will be able to tell me.

I enjoyed it.



By the way, I meant to say that the title is very poignant.

Zettel at 10:07 on 17 July 2006  Report this post

Glad you liked it. Thanks for the comments. I can't answer your question I'm afraid - just glad it does work!



The Walrus at 19:40 on 02 August 2006  Report this post
Sigh... how utterly lovely...


Zettel at 09:09 on 12 August 2006  Report this post

been away. thanks for the comment. couldn't be better


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