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All that I had

by Scott 

Posted: 31 August 2003
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I've experienced love

The wonders that could only come from above

I've experienced pain and terrible loss

I've experienced it all so take me now

For I no longer have any more to gain


'Life without wonder is not a life at all'

Scott






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Bobo at 17:28 on 31 August 2003  Report this post
Scott -

This is so sad and it felt also really raw. Very beautiful, very stark.

The 2nd line read awkwardly for me - maybe if you split it into 2 lines it would help the flow...? Just an idea...

BoBo x
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olebut at 18:25 on 31 August 2003  Report this post
scott


full of raw emotion

ref the 2nd line would it work if you amended it to

the wonders that could only come from above


take care

david
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