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My Space

by The Walrus 

Posted: 30 August 2003
Word Count: 74
Summary: A very un-pretty first draft.


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The beckoning sanctuary
Of balmy space.
Four walls of freedom.
It ain't big
But size ain't everything.
It's mine
For me to define
To haphazardly create
To purposefully shape.

The tantalizing selection
Of sublime sounds
That surround
Me in my space
Revolving and moving
Nakedly prancing.

To reflect upon
Another crazy day
To scurry arround
Or chill out sofa-bound
It don't matter

No pesky phones,
No people, no moans.
Just me
In my space.






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Fearless at 10:27 on 30 August 2003  Report this post
'Revolving and moving'

'Nakedly prancing'

'To reflect upon'

'Just me in my space'

........best line of all, for me, was 'four walls of freedom'

Worthy stuff.

Fearless

poemsgalore at 12:31 on 30 August 2003  Report this post
This is a first draft? Sounds good as it is for me.

pene at 18:54 on 14 October 2003  Report this post
brilliant dont change it,,,, please

The Walrus at 19:04 on 14 October 2003  Report this post
Clearly, I have been too lazy to do so.

Thanks for your feedback.

Slothful Walrus


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