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MY LIFERAFT - THE EDITOR`S FEEDBACK

by Beanie Baby 

Posted: 21 June 2006
Word Count: 82
Summary: A little bit of sheer blood and guts determination here but I know most writers will identify with it.


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Words are pools
through which I wade,
and build my castles
with my spade
until I spot a tiny beach
where future success
lies in reach.
I stop and read
the editor's letter,
now my life is looking better.
Okay it's not a huge advance
that makes me sing
or want to dance,
at least she felt
my heartfelt work
was worth response -
to light the dark.
So words are pools,
and now I swim,
all because
I WON'T GIVE IN!!!!






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NinaLara at 17:14 on 22 June 2006  Report this post
I love the opening - the sand castles. I like the rhyme too. Infact the first 4 lines are just wonderful all on their own!

Katy Kat at 21:43 on 22 June 2006  Report this post
Hi Beanie

The determination in every line is childlike

and build my castles
with my spade


and childlike determination cannot be defeated..

Great stuff

Best

Kate

DJC at 21:22 on 24 June 2006  Report this post
Beanie,

Ah yes, we all know this feeling. It's what keeps bringing me back to this site after a month or two away, as I know I have to keep going, even when I have patches of 'what's the point?' A really well realised piece of writing.

Darren

paul53 [for I am he] at 18:40 on 25 June 2006  Report this post
I'm with Nina, except I would have halted the piece at line 7.

Beanie Baby at 07:34 on 29 June 2006  Report this post
Thank you all for your response. Glad you liked it.
Beanie


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