Login   Sign Up 



 

Make do with no language where none will do

by Paul Isthmus 

Posted: 01 June 2006
Word Count: 131
Related Works: Houses of Glass (unseasonal) • 

Font Size
 


Printable Version
Print Double spaced


Make do with no language where none will do
and pay attention to be born of silence
Perhaps the colours of your heart have flared
and laughter ended, tears paused in falling -
little glass tears smashed with a single note
high behind your hearing.

Turn in to the silence when silence is due,
and pay attention to what's borne by language
Maybe the connection between your bones and thinking
have all been severed, thought curved in thought-time;
frozen high above the arctic, a single memory -
London dormitary town.

Watch the brawling filth like a picture
from a world you're not involved in,
that you only imagine. Draw the strong thread
out through the ether, boil it in silver,
moonlight ions in an ancient enclosure,
in a silken, pillow'd mansion.






Favourite this work Favourite This Author


Comments by other Members



paul53 [for I am he] at 14:32 on 02 June 2006  Report this post
I am probably doing this a disservice because I have been off-site so long that on my return I have found 9 poems awaiting my attention and comment.
This strikes me as a very cerebral piece. There are strong images and clever and unique metaphors, but I can't say I have yet grasped the overall picture of it yet, so I will pause here, see to the other 8 poems, and give this further consideration.

Paul Isthmus at 15:04 on 02 June 2006  Report this post
I haven't really got a clue about it either. It lacks feeling for me - I agree about it being cerebral. There's a sort of lost, disconnected sense about it. Its tone is pretty hard and unforgiving. There's another voice that wants to speak. Maybe this is only half a poem.

paul53 [for I am he] at 18:37 on 02 June 2006  Report this post
Thinking more on it, it comes across to me like discovering an unexpected tome with instructions in it that have to be understood and acted upon. A puzzle to solve; a knot to undo. This is in itself not a bad thing as poems [in part tug] at strings deep in our subconscious.

joanie at 20:12 on 02 June 2006  Report this post
Hi, Paul. I think the first two stanzas of this are better on their own and ditch the third. But then ..... I am re-reading and I do like
Draw the strong thread
out through the ether, boil it in silver,
moonlight ions in an ancient enclosure,
in a silken, pillow'd mansion.


Yes... a puzzle which one can't resist coming back to, despite the fact that it takes over!

I need to return sometime and see this with new eyes!

Thought-provoking, certainly.

joanie


Elsie at 21:27 on 02 June 2006  Report this post
Hi Paul
There's a certain formality to this - like going back in time - hints of a kind of alchemy perhaps, and the words 'borne' - (though later 'born'), and the 'pillow'd'.

In each stanza I am drawn to the more concrete images - the tears smashing, bones and thinking severed, and the thread through ether.

I can't quite grasp the feeling in it. I'll come back.

Elsie at 21:27 on 02 June 2006  Report this post
Hi Paul
There's a certain formality to this - like going back in time - hints of a kind of alchemy perhaps, and the words 'borne' - (though later 'born'), and the 'pillow'd'.

In each stanza I am drawn to the more concrete images - the tears smashing, bones and thinking severed, and the thread through ether.

I can't quite grasp the feeling in it. I'll come back.

<Added>

ooops - sorry for the double posting.

NinaLara at 13:15 on 03 June 2006  Report this post
Dear Paul - I really like the first verse, which expresses the inexpressible. The second verse is less easy to grasp, but it does suggest something about memory. As I grew up in metroland perhaps my imagination is running away with this - a disembodiment, a memory so distant that is no longer is a memory of your own body, but someone else's.
The last verse takes removes us from the world, where the filth is something that happens out there. But perhaps this removal is a temporary moment of self reflection, a necessary retreat? So that we can make our world grow for us again?
I like this Paul - as much for the impression of shiny objectsd smashing and coming together in space as anything else.

Nina


Nell at 13:50 on 03 June 2006  Report this post
Hi Paul

I keep reading - this poem does repay that. All of the above comments seem to touch on something of the impression the poem makes on me so I won't repeat them. Perhaps you could find an element to strengthen; like Elsie, the alchemical slant drew me - the narrator could almost be a reincarnation of John Dee.

Hesitation at ...borne of silence... (on?). I actually checked in two dictionaries - there are other meanings apart from the verb 'to bear' - bourne also means stream or boundary.


Nell.

Paul Isthmus at 16:24 on 06 June 2006  Report this post
Thanks for your comments everyone. Of the alchemical aspect, I think there's something of the warmth of gold missing from it - it's all the moon rather than the sun, maybe it needs a hint of the return that you mention Nina, after the disattachment, distance and reflection. Not quite sure how to incorporate it though.

Nell - thinking that I might change when born and borne occur, so as to make

Make do with no language where none will do
and pay attention to be born of silence...

Turn in to the silence when silence is due,
and pay attention to what's borne by language.


What do you think?


Nell at 07:36 on 07 June 2006  Report this post
Hi Paul,

Definitely - the exchange works very well. And I like the imagery of Turn into the silence... very much; it's akin to Tune into the silence... yet different, and something of that comes across to make the image of physically turning into silence more acute by contrast.

Nell.


To post comments you need to become a member. If you are already a member, please log in .