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The Promise of Early Summer
Posted: 21 May 2006
Word Count: 22
Summary: Suddenly everywhere is green.
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While we waited,
in the shade
of her closet
she was getting
ready.
Green
has arrived
on time
as
she always
does.
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 Laura Hunt at 15:46 on 21 May 2006
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My oh my, Joanie. This is good stuff - amazing metaphor for spring. Love the allusion to the cold of winter:
While we waited,
in the shade
of her closet |
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makes me feel like we were wrapped up in winter clothes - hiding in the wardrobe in our mothers' woolies.
Sylvia
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smudger at 22:11 on 21 May 2006
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Hi joanie,
Liked the metaphor about the closet, although, after a brief excursion, we're all back inside shivering now...
Tony
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tinyclanger at 09:42 on 22 May 2006
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Like your line/verse breaks here Joanie -something I'm pondering on after James G's article....the way 'shade' sort-of dangles, is super!
x
tc
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 joanie at 10:35 on 22 May 2006
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Thanks, tc. Much appreciated! It's amazing what a difference a line break can make isn't it? That would be a useful excercise, I think, ..... as I am typing I am suddenly reminded of an exercise we did in Poetry Seminar. I think we all took the same piece of prose and set it out as a poem. Mmmmm... I shall have to look through the archives.
Thanks again.
Joan
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joanie at 10:36 on 22 May 2006
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Tony, thanks! Yes, it's definitley taken a backwards step.
joanie
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definitely oh dear!
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joanie at 12:22 on 22 May 2006
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Look under 'Groups' - Poetry 1. It's the latest thread there.
Joan
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