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The Promise of Early Summer

by joanie 

Posted: 21 May 2006
Word Count: 22
Summary: Suddenly everywhere is green.


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While we waited,
in the shade
of her closet
she was getting
ready.

Green
has arrived
on time

as
she always
does.












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Laura Hunt at 15:46 on 21 May 2006  Report this post
My oh my, Joanie. This is good stuff - amazing metaphor for spring. Love the allusion to the cold of winter:

While we waited,
in the shade
of her closet


makes me feel like we were wrapped up in winter clothes - hiding in the wardrobe in our mothers' woolies.

Sylvia

joanie at 18:37 on 21 May 2006  Report this post
Sylvia, thank you! Glad it spoke to you.

Joan

smudger at 22:11 on 21 May 2006  Report this post
Hi joanie,
Liked the metaphor about the closet, although, after a brief excursion, we're all back inside shivering now...

Tony


tinyclanger at 09:42 on 22 May 2006  Report this post
Like your line/verse breaks here Joanie -something I'm pondering on after James G's article....the way 'shade' sort-of dangles, is super!
x
tc

joanie at 10:35 on 22 May 2006  Report this post
Thanks, tc. Much appreciated! It's amazing what a difference a line break can make isn't it? That would be a useful excercise, I think, ..... as I am typing I am suddenly reminded of an exercise we did in Poetry Seminar. I think we all took the same piece of prose and set it out as a poem. Mmmmm... I shall have to look through the archives.

Thanks again.

Joan

joanie at 10:36 on 22 May 2006  Report this post
Tony, thanks! Yes, it's definitley taken a backwards step.

joanie

<Added>

definitely oh dear!

Laura Hunt at 12:19 on 22 May 2006  Report this post
James G's article.


Hi - Where can I find this?

thanks

Sylvia

joanie at 12:22 on 22 May 2006  Report this post
Look under 'Groups' - Poetry 1. It's the latest thread there.

Joan

Account Closed at 09:11 on 26 May 2006  Report this post
Ooh, clarity, power and truth (those famous solicitors ..) - loved it, Joanie!

:))

A
xxx

joanie at 12:37 on 26 May 2006  Report this post
Many thanks, Holly.

joanie


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