DJC at 09:23 on 21 May 2006
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Tracey - this is lovely, so I think we can let you off your slight alteration! After all, this is all about taking ideas and running with them, not always sticking slavishly with things. I think the opening lines are particularly powerful. Beautifully written throughout.
D.
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Katy Kat at 12:30 on 21 May 2006
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Tracey
This is so beautiful-in the words of J Lennon - 'more I cannot say'.
a gossamer shawl that turned
the light of sun and moon
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Kate
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ccatherine at 12:33 on 21 May 2006
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How I would love to write like this. The image is so beautiful.
Not got time to comment further.
Cathy
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joanie at 13:13 on 21 May 2006
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apsara. This is absolutely fantastic. The words, ideas and images are just excellent.
And when she looked at you
a searchlight probed the cracks
and crevices of your heart. |
| is beautifully observed. Whatever one's age, grandmothers can do just this!
joanie
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DJC at 05:50 on 22 May 2006
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Mmm, sounds nice, doesn't it. There aren't enough sentences with the word
'cherishable' in, are there. We should do something about that.
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