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Into the Abyss

by Ling Ling 

Posted: 25 August 2003
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The Darkness seems to pull me
like a serpent swept along with the tide
into the gentle arms of solitude.
I think, I feel, but I cannot see,
so all I can do is accept this invitation
and allow myself to be carried.
I Imagine creatures touching me as they pass me by,
but they fail to leave so much as an impression.
I glide through this endless journey,
happy that when I feel your touch
the darkness will become a vision.







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The Walrus at 10:12 on 26 August 2003  Report this post
The imagery is dark and powerful. Reminded me of D H Lawrence's 'Bavarian Gentians'. Also reminded me of how we are all swept randomnly down life's river!

Good stuff Ling Ling. Keep writing!

The Walrus

Fearless at 23:30 on 26 August 2003  Report this post
Tis a very fine beginning oh bamboo-addicted Chinese Panda.
We all look forward to seeing more.

Ciao, Fearless

Ioannou at 12:20 on 29 August 2003  Report this post
Safety is someone else closeby. I like the idea behind this. I think the paragraph format doesn't do it justice. Love, Maria.

Fearless at 12:29 on 29 August 2003  Report this post
I agree with Maria, the format can be improved to bring out the feeling that much more powerfully.

Fearless

roovacrag at 12:48 on 29 August 2003  Report this post
Keep up the good work.
I enjoyed it.
alice xx

Fearless at 13:16 on 29 August 2003  Report this post
The Darkness seems to pull me
Like a serpant swept along with the tide
Into the gentle arms of solitude.
I think, I feel, but I cannot see
All I can do is accept this invitation
And allow myself to be carried.
I Imagine creatures touching me as they pass me by,
But they fail to leave so much as an impression.
I glide through this endless journey,
Happy that when I feel your touch
This darkness will become a vision.



Fearless


Ling Ling at 09:58 on 30 August 2003  Report this post
Ok Guys, have changed the paragraph. Thank you for all your comments peeps. I shall await my next spontaneous moment of inspiration! Michelle x


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