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Fishing

by RoseDillon 

Posted: 25 March 2006
Word Count: 33
Summary: Imagine looking out from your journey to see a man in silence dipping his line into a stagnant pond by a dilapitated bridge. This is how I saw him...


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Fishing I saw him. Silent, standing,
Behind roars the roadside, runs
Of a bridge. The line lost among
The Nike. Still, cold, capped.
Only hearing the ramble of
The train into the distance.






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joanie at 19:55 on 26 March 2006  Report this post
Hi Rose, and welcome to WW. This is an excellent snapshot, but I think it would b even better without the capitals;
Fishing I saw him. Silent, standing,
behind roars the roadside, runs
of a bridge. The line lost among
the Nike. Still, cold, capped.
Only hearing the ramble of
the train into the distance.


Did you mean 'rumble'?

I enjoyed this.
joanie



didau at 21:00 on 24 May 2010  Report this post
Would be interesting to reduce this to a haiku

Fishing by the road
line lost in still, cold water
a train rumbles past

No?



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