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Birth and Death
Posted: 11 January 2006
Word Count: 11
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As one face goes
another one emerges
to get to know.
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 joanie at 15:00 on 11 January 2006
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Lovely, Stephen. Beautifully succinct and full of meaning. I would leave out the semi-colon if this were mine, I think, also the capital of 'Another'.
joanie
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 hailfabio at 11:41 on 12 January 2006
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Thanks Joanie,
I'm not sure why I put that semi-colon in, it does blow better without it.
Stephen
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Barlow at 12:38 on 14 January 2006
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There's so much meaning in these few words. Most effective.
Best wishes,
Barlow
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DJC at 18:48 on 15 January 2006
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To the point and interesting. Have you tried getting rid of the first word? Sounds more like a haiku then, as it's more distilled, less like a sentence.
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smudger at 12:39 on 16 January 2006
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Hi Stephen,
This has lots of depth and a hint of some Buddhist philosophy, although maybe that's just me reading more into it than you intended...
Well done.
smudger
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hailfabio at 09:15 on 17 January 2006
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Thanks all,
Not too familier with Buddism, but it sounds good. The haiku came from the saying, hear of a death, hear of a birth.
Stephen
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Beanie Baby at 09:23 on 17 January 2006
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This is EXACTLY what haiku is all about. First class piece that says volumes in few words. Absolutely loved this!
Beanie
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