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Erato

by Adam 

Posted: 05 August 2003
Word Count: 10
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Expectant lover,
Waiting by a stream,
Talks of unbegotten dreams.






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Richard Brown at 19:15 on 28 October 2003  Report this post
I'm not a poet but this seems haiku-like to me. (5/7/5 syllables, is it not, in the 'pure' pure form? Is this 5/5/7 a version with a name or is the order of lines variable in haiku?)
I guess the third line, in true haiku style, does contrast to some degree with the other two; ie inaction versus action. I was interested in the word 'unbegotten'. Does this refer to unfulfilled dream-wishes or to reveries that are too perfect to bring to mind? Whatever, a pleasingly teasing ambiguity for me.
Richard.
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