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On such a day as executions fall

by LONGJON 

Posted: 04 August 2003
Word Count: 115
Summary: Sonnet in English form. Final rework......


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ON SUCH A DAY AS EXECUTIONS FALL

On such a day as executions fall,
Two tiny puddles, oval, silver, mute.
Born on ground as black as Magogs caul,
Ragged orphan, guileless, dying, nude.
This ill-formed offspring of a careless god,
Which, ripped like thunder from a spartan womb
And shed like spittle on the dark, cold sod,
Lies sombre and still by a greedy tomb.
Thus do our children call the hangman’s skill,
For since the child sees all there is to see
And cannot turn its gaze from good or ill,
So judges all by being judgement free.
For man, made father, taking child from mate,
So does she hand him his unbending fate.






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LONGJON at 23:27 on 04 August 2003  Report this post
Hi Fevvers

Here 'tis

John P.

olebut at 23:37 on 04 August 2003  Report this post
Bloody hell mate this is one powerful poem brilliant

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oh that should be

yer tiz

Ellenna at 07:13 on 05 August 2003  Report this post
John..this is perfect..the mood you have created is stunning. Terrific

Ellie:)

LONGJON at 10:04 on 08 August 2003  Report this post
Hi Ellie,

Many thanks for your comment, Fevvers should take credit for much of this, I think I'm basically lazy, she said pull finger and get working.

Take care

John P.

pene at 14:01 on 18 August 2003  Report this post
i really enjoyed this well written emotive piece

take care and keep writing!
Pene


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