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Interest

by hailfabio 

Posted: 27 November 2005
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False admiration.

Thought you could deal with it.
Sort a feel for it.
And we could peel through it.
There's no secret to it.
We secreet fluid.
Until interest dries out.
I cry out.

False hope.






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The Walrus at 18:58 on 29 November 2005  Report this post
A short but hugely poignant piece, which I liked very much.

Christina
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Beanie Baby at 20:28 on 29 November 2005  Report this post
Hmm! Had to read this twice and am still not sure if I've grasped it. It is very thought provoking and almost has a subliminal feel to it. It reads well out loud and is quite hypnotic! Enjoyed it very much.
Beanie
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hailfabio at 11:24 on 01 December 2005  Report this post
Hi,

It's basically about developing interest in someone or something but it just doesn't work out.

Thanks
Stephen
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Beanie Baby at 12:29 on 01 December 2005  Report this post
Bless you Stephen that makes it a lot clearer!
Beanie
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Account Closed at 09:26 on 09 December 2005  Report this post
Wonderful rap piece - bet it's great as a performance poem! I think though it might be "secrete" and not "secreet"??

Great stuff

A
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Laura Hunt at 13:24 on 09 December 2005  Report this post
I've come back to this several times, and yes, i can hear it as a rap, too.
yup - secrete.

Laura
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