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Flight of Fantasy
Posted: 07 November 2005
Word Count: 83
Summary: This is my entry in Challenge 71. I hope you enjoy it.
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Close your eyes. Let your imagination soar. What do you see?
It's twilight and we're flying over the Hawkesbury River just like Peter Pan gliding like a gull through the evening sky, just for the beauty of it. The air is balmy and still. The evening light is reflected as lavender within the indigo ripples of the water. We're enveloped in the hues of misty blue. The sky, the river, the gums and the steep sandstone cliffs gently melt into one.
We're happy.
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 Prospero at 04:55 on 08 November 2005
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Hi Di
This is what fiction is all about; communicating your fantasy.
Beautiful
John
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 choille at 12:22 on 08 November 2005
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Yes I thought this was lovely and created a vivid image.
Caroline
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 crowspark at 21:20 on 08 November 2005
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This is excellent Di.
The opening is crisp, the descriptions appealing. A good blend blend of varying length sentences. I particularly enjoyed:
| The sky, the river, the gums and the steep sandstone cliffs gently melt into one. |
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Wonderful stuff.
Bill
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di2 at 20:53 on 10 November 2005
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Nik, John,Caroline and Bill, thank you, your comments are very encouraging. I've been carrying the image of gliding over the river with me for a long time. It was nice to write it down.
Di
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Jumbo at 17:33 on 12 November 2005
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Di
Lovely images - and you've captured perfectly that feeling of soaring above the water.
Only one question (I'll probably regret asking this)- but what are 'the gums'? For me that word spoilt the rhythm of the sentence, but that was almost beause I don't know what it means.
Nice writing. Thanks.
jumbo
<Added>
Sorry, that should say - but that was almost certainly because I don't know what it means.
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Prospero at 17:47 on 12 November 2005
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Gums are Australian trees aren't they?
G'day
Cobblers
(or should that be Cobbers, me little Jumpbucks)
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Jumbo at 17:53 on 12 November 2005
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Sorry, cobbler
I thought they were those little black chewy sweets.
Must admit, I missed the Aussie connection - funny how you read something and then interpret it within your own (limted) field of experience.
But thanks again, Sheila. Give my regards to Roo!
jumbs (similar to gums but spelt differently)
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di2 at 04:07 on 13 November 2005
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The word "gums" relates to that wonderful part of the Australian Bush call the gum tree. It did occur to me that it could be read as gummy lollies and that would not quite be as poetic. But what the hec . . .
An alternative word would have been Eucalypts but it seemed too contrived as it's not a word I would use in my day to day conversation.
The Gum Tree for me, as an Australian, evokes an imagining that goes far beyond the tree itself. Similar, I think, to the Oak Tree for the English. It's all tied up with today's reality and the memory of yesterday. When you put your hand against the silver grey trunk of a gum tree, it's like you can feel it breathing, it's smooth as silk. If the sun is shining and it usually is, the trunk is warm. When the hot sun is on the trees, they discharge a fine mist of eucalyptus oil from their leaves, this results in a blue haze. The overall effect from a distance is really beautiful. The Blue Mountains of New South Wales is famous for this effect. The Hawkesbury River I mentioned in my written piece, is not so famous, but it is beautiful also.
Thank you for reading my work. Your comments encouraged me to describe the gum in more detail and I found writing it down was really enjoyable.
Di2
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Prospero at 03:05 on 15 November 2005
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Believe it or not we have Eucalyptus trees in Dubai, but not in great enough numbers to create a blue haze. I remember passing a 'Gum' one day and smelling the distinctive tang of embrocation, and thinking 'Oh wow, that is a Eucalyptus tree, what is that doing here?' It was right in the middle of a souk (arab market.
Cheers
John
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crowspark at 11:55 on 15 November 2005
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I thought gum trees was perfect, Your additional description of the blue haze is great but I think that is what I saw anyway.
Thanks for that great description.
Bill
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Anj at 19:06 on 15 November 2005
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Di,
Lovely writing, left me feeling really peaceful. For me, "We're enveloped in the hues of misty blue" was one too many descriptive sentences, but just loved that last line.
Andrea
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