just a position by goldenpath - WriteWords.org.uk

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just a position

by goldenpath

Posted: 02 November 2005
Word Count: 62
Summary: Genetic engineering will make monkeys of us all, we're 99.4% related, so what does that make you and me? First draft don't know if (any of) it works so all comments greatly appreciated.

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Thin fingers pricked meniscoid skin
Mixed coital inkspills swirling spin
Springs coiling intercoursal cling
Fixed colours boiling from within

Fool’s casket decked in burning jewels
Two mascots tricked to learn the tools
Cool trinkets plucked from twinkling pools
Four symbols linked to golden rules

Free monkeys climbing puzzle trees
Three flunkeys finding riddle keys
Gene junkie mining pioneers
We drunken blinded volunteers

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Shika at 19:54 on 02 November 2005 Report this post

Hi there

I am not sure I understood all the metaphors in this but what I enjoyed was the rhythm and the word play which you controlled throughout. I loved the pulling trinkets from cool pools and the monkeys climbling puzzle trees and the flunkeys finding riddle keys (dna analysis?). Hope this helps.S

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goldenpath at 20:18 on 02 November 2005 Report this post

Hello Shika

Thanks for the feedback, I was toying with the idea of monkeys dabbling in dna/genetics to discover our relationship with them, but then again I suppose it's already happened in a reality flip kind of way. Cheers Andy

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