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misbeliever - synopsis

by eanna 

Posted: 27 October 2005
Word Count: 402
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There is no way back. All that there is is this life. We become the sun, and with the sun we become the stars, never ever again to be the same whole beings. There is no heaven, no hell, no nothing. We are everything in the entire universe at once, and nothing, forever.

There is a ritual almost two thousand years old, the secret of which is contained in a number of valuable writings that seem to outline the middle years of Jesus Christ. These writings are well guarded and can only be accessed with the express permission of the Church, access that may be granted to a writer for instance, researching a book of religious interpretations and ignorant to the real value of the scrolls.
It is for this reason that Jacob a thriller writer has been coerced into taking on the project offered him. The chance to re-write the bible isn't one that he can possibly refuse.
The protagonist, Michael De Rhy is a powerful French millionaire who is determined that he will not just fade away, that he will live again beyond his advanced years.
Jacob travels to West Africa to obtain the last piece of the puzzle for the book he has now realised to be a deception. But he is hooked by the opportunity to write something bigger than he, a work both lasting and momentous.
Michael De Rhy commits the uncompleted ritual and is unleashed on the world as Leavon. A young and powerful demon, Leavon has only one aim, to find Jacob and solidify his existence by completing the unholy ritual.
After a chase, on which they encounter a group of earthy and empathic characters, Jacob and Leavon finally face each other in a dried-out riverbed atop the waterfall in Banfora, Burkina Faso.
Jacob has no chance. Leavon is far too strong for the man. Yet in the end the earth proves too strong for this unnatural being and the two are swept out over the edge of the cascades by the new waters at the mercy of nature.
Only Jacob survives the fall. Crippled and unable to communicate he fights his was back to a semblance of health, proving what Michael De Rhy could never have learned. This one life is enough for anyone. It is only made more important by its singularity. Jacob is alive and while he is, he is.

The End

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ang at 09:57 on 02 November 2005  Report this post
I love the first paragraph of this, really beautiful writing.
I felt that the 2000 yr old ritual paragraph should be the second paragraph rather than half way through. This is really intriguing and gives a good idea of the book plot right from the start. Otherwise I found it read a little like a character list.
How many pages is this? It still seems a little long for a synopis.
It sounds like you have a really interesting idea here. Also thrillers are selling well at the moment so this is a perfect time to be pitching it. Have you sent it out yet?
Angela ;)

robski at 16:14 on 07 November 2005  Report this post
Hi Eanna,

Good choice of story, a religious thriller, very topical at the moment. Although it sounds as though there is a fair bit of supernatural goings on as well. But I think you need to condense what you have a little more, just concentrate on the main thread of the story and I think it will read better off the page, no need for specific place names and details, stick to the plot line and m/c.

good luck with it


eanna at 20:00 on 09 November 2005  Report this post
Thanks guys, I'm working on it write now, aha!

Anj at 19:47 on 05 December 2005  Report this post

This sounds topical and with plenty of scope to deal with the Big Things.

I thought the first paragraph was great, but couldn't quite see it's relevance to the story.

'Yet in the end the earth proves too strong for this unnatural being and the two are swept out over the edge of the cascades by the new waters at the mercy of nature'. This sentence was very long and I think 'at the mercy of nature' is pretty much a repetition of 'the earth proves too strong', although to be honest I wasn't quite sure what you meant by it.

I did find it slightly confusing, I felt you needed either to expand it and explain some points, or else pare it to the real barebones and link the events more fluidly if you need an even shorter one.

But it's dramatic and evocatively written and sounds a fascinating story. Best of luck with it



btw, I love your title

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