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Intelligent Design

by goldenpath 

Posted: 21 October 2005
Word Count: 274
Summary: A little dark-hearted nonsense about youth, celebrity, celebrity youth and....erm....good wholesome violence! Written in haste in an attempt to keep the pace, so all comments greatly appreciated,is it rap or is crap? If you can't beat 'em, stab 'em!


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Welcome to another time where crime is called disorder
Disorder from a state of mind, hyperactive of a kind
Kind that labels low-life haughty, haute couture but more than naughty

Rappers spouting crap as they are chillin’ in the ‘hood
A hood to mask a trap where ‘sense’ is killing common good

Party at the corner shop, “Stop the bus I’m getting off”
A flash of light and down I drop, the fallout from an alcopop

Excuses for the uses of a blade hid in a pocket
A pocket full of use with hot blood jetting from your socket

Nothing else is left to fear except that fear itself
As selfish cheers ring round my ears, a harmony of hate and stealth
Stinging stench of cheap stale beer, discharge from a drunken leer
Mingle with the spit and tears, impression from a footprint clear

Celebrity feigns shame in a cloudburst of cocaine
A pinch to ease the pain, a crutch to lift the lame
A blanket for the vain, “Oh look another hurricane”
Wash hands of any blame, dry desert skies cry out for rain

Trip the light fantastic, fashioned out of plastic
Dipped in bling so drastic, golden and tantastic

Disappear into a world where you exist and I observe
Back among the cheapest seats, stumbling to your drumming beats

Words of wisdom to ignore, your empire mantra “more is more”
A paradox of ripened fruit that tastes so sour to rotten youth

Easy to impreza brain that views a weakness as a gain
Where shopping’s an Olympic game and ‘stupid’ is a route to fame
Spectators all the same
Repetition in refrain






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Shika at 18:55 on 21 October 2005  Report this post
Lovin' it! I think its a rap and a rant and a chant. An amazing outpouring of rhyme and reason to fit this season. Hey! It's contagious! Very impressed that it came out in one flow. Nice one. S

goldenpath at 20:16 on 21 October 2005  Report this post
Cheers Shika, it could do with a few changes I think but was left pretty much 'as first written' while the bile was still bubbling. Thanks again. Andy

Account Closed at 01:34 on 22 October 2005  Report this post
I had a look at your other stuff and it's amazing! I'd say this piece wasn't one that stood out as much as some of the others, but they're all fabulous. I hope you're pursuing some kind of publication of these? Fantastic. So original. I love originality.

joanie at 15:29 on 22 October 2005  Report this post
goldenpath, this is great. I love the rap feel to it - I can't help saying it aloud. I like the words repeated at the end/start of lines in the first part.

Excellent.

joanie

goldenpath at 22:32 on 24 October 2005  Report this post
Thank You for all your comments, I'm a bit of a sporadic user of this site due to work commitments and struggling with the real world! But I love browsing through all of the stuff uploaded and I'm genuinely dumbfounded that people like some of what I'm doing. Got tons of half-baked ideas lying about (literally) and the positive feedback has encouraged me to get off my lazy ass and put out some more. Thanks again. Andy


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