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When you wish upon a Moon

by Jubbly 

Posted: 18 October 2005
Word Count: 230
Summary: Entry for challenge 68.

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When you wish upon a Moon.

The boy sat mesmerised, powerless to move away. To a spectator it would seem an invisible thread connected the child to his object of fascination, fusing the two together like a life long umbilical chord.

“If you don’t stop staring at the moon Ed, you is going to turn into a werewolf.” warned his sister. “It’s true I read it in the library.”

“It’s meant to be, “ he said solemnly, “its cause of mum, don’t you know?”

He made a vow that night, when his family were fast asleep; he perched alone on his bedroom windowsill and spoke in a low determined voice.

“I will do it, I will be the first, I will always be remembered, it’s my destiny, I will be the first.” He repeated those words over and over until dawn broke then fell exhausted into bed curled up cosy under his homemade quilt.

Thirty years later, the son of Marion Moon and her husband Edwin was disappointed. Very disappointed but he tried not to show it. You see, he wasn’t the first he was the second which shouldn’t really be any cause for complaint. But as friends would often remind him after one too many beers in the Sunset Inn, “Second man on the moon don’t have quite the same ring as first man, what you say eh Buzz?”

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crowspark at 12:57 on 18 October 2005  Report this post
Great flash Julie. I don’t remember Ed Moon (unlike his batty second cousin Ed Case) ;)
Great opening, and liked “invisible thread”, and “life long umbilical chord”. Powerful image of the little boy making his vow (“pledge” for the US audience maybe?)

Love the sound of that homemade quilt.

Great ending.


Dreamer at 23:14 on 18 October 2005  Report this post
Hi Julie,

I take it the father's name was Edwin Aldrin?



Ah, I see that it was. You are a wealth of interesting trivia.


You did have me convinced he was going to be a werewolf. Did not see the end coming.

Jubbly at 12:30 on 19 October 2005  Report this post
Thanks for reading and commenting Dreamer and Bill. The dad was called Edwin as was the son but Ed jnr changed his name legally to his nickname Buzz years ago but his mum really was called Miss Moon.


choille at 23:20 on 20 October 2005  Report this post
This was great and the ending unexpected, very clever. So much in such few words.

Jubbly at 09:55 on 21 October 2005  Report this post
Thankyou very much Caroline, I do like to keep things brief.


Jumbo at 16:14 on 22 October 2005  Report this post

This was very clever - and I didn't anticipate the ending in any way!

I was competely taken in by thw werewolf deception. reat writing!

All the best


Jim Beard at 17:45 on 22 October 2005  Report this post

Great twist compteley threw me at the end having expected a werewolf job.



Dee at 09:53 on 23 October 2005  Report this post
Great flash, Julie. I love quirky little details like this one about his mother’s name. Brilliant!

Also love the lyrical quality of umbilical chord… but shouldn’t it be cord? ;)


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