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The Meaning of Me

by Ambitions of Lisa 

Posted: 14 October 2005
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Your blue eyes
Like whirlpools
Drawing me in
Spiralling deep
Into your mind

Images flash by
A reel of film
Your memories
Your thoughts
Your dreams

I hear the crackle
Of audio sound
The broken voices
And the laughter
You’ve heard

I look for me
In your filmstrip
I need to know
What you think
What you dream

I see the darkness
And blurry visions
But my face
Imprinted clearly
Is visibly alive

My lip-gloss smile
Lined blue eyes
Glossy dark hair
Surrounded by
Smudges of confusion

A hazy mist
Of doubt, uncertainty
I reach out
To touch the image
To clear my misty aura

But only you
Can be director
Write the script
And produce
The meaning of me






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hailfabio at 11:55 on 27 October 2005  Report this post
I'll comment on this for you Lis.

I do like it. Very dark and eery, gives feeling of an old film reel. Are you saying our lives are already mapped out by someone and we act it out?

Or could be that we seek a partner for direction?

Mills
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Brian Aird at 12:50 on 27 October 2005  Report this post
The idea that we define ourselves in relation to others and that the eyes are the window of the soul is well explored here. I liked the way the short lines act like captions, echoing the idea of the 'film' introduced in the second verse.

It has been said that the 'self' is largely a work of fiction and the 'memories are movies' idea worked well. But the really unsettling idea; that we are defined (at least in part?) by the way we are perceived by others and that we aren't in control, we're not the director, producer or even the script writer, comes across brilliantly in the last verse.

Kaufman's 'Eternal sunshine of the Spotless Mind' came to mind as I read it, though that was more about removing shared memories than working with them.

I'm not sure if you intended every line to default to Microsoft's 'always a cap at the start of a line' rule and to do without punctuation. I'd be interested in what others think about that.

Brian
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Ambitions of Lisa at 10:41 on 28 October 2005  Report this post
Thank you Stephen and Brian

Yes I thought it an interesting subject to explore, how we define ourselves depending on what others think of us and their actions and emotions towards us.

I also wanted to create the feeling of the memory being represented as a film reel, so I'm glad it came across in the way I had hoped.

Yes... I wondered about punctuation and the capitals Brian. I'd be interested to know what others think about this too.

Lis
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