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Through The Loop
Posted: 05 October 2005
Word Count: 26
Summary: Having just become unemployed at the age of 48, this is how I am feeling ...
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I slip through the loop.
I freefall in purple void.
I seek but don't find.
I'll never give up the hunt.
It can only get better.
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 laurafraser at 11:09 on 05 October 2005
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sorry abt the job...
shd it be 'a purple void'??
i like this conveys a sense of urgency you might feel on being made unemployed
but think you can go deeper with it -No?
'It can only get better' sounds a litt;e trite as if you have already admited defeat, there is no hidden strength here, which reading your other poems i know you have in buckets
i like e/t else before the last bit, don' mean to criticise when you a re down, but i think using the feeling s you are feeling now to create a poem you wouldn't have been able to otherwise has the npotential to give birth too something powerful and authentic
xL.
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Ticonderoga at 16:19 on 05 October 2005
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I know the feeling all too well; as a 'nutshell' this is very good, but I agree with laura that it feels as though it wants to go deeper. Maybe this is the germ.
Best,
Mike
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Laura Hunt at 20:00 on 05 October 2005
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If you could bear it I too would like you to explore, through the poem, the purple void further! - The first 2 lines are`fantastic.
But outside the poem don't free fall too far - the bastards aren't worth it.
Laura Hunt
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Shika at 20:20 on 05 October 2005
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Hi there
Have to agree with Laura. I like the colour purple. It's mystical and symbolises creativity. Given the circs it fits well. Wish you all the best.S
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Nik Perring at 01:34 on 06 October 2005
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Oh Beanster, hard luck. Does freelance writing call? It should; think you're good enough.
The poem was great. Really emotive and sad. But you're right when you talk about not giving up.
Somoene once said that every setback is also a new opportunity. And I think he's right. Or she, I'm not sexist, could be a she...
Purple, by the way, from what I've read, symbolises royalty, spirituality and creativity. It is a GOOD colour!
Best wishes,
Nik. ;)
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 joanie at 17:55 on 06 October 2005
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Hi Beanie. Hope things soon improve! I freefall in purple void sounds wonderful to me; I'm sure you could take it further. I agree that the first two lines are the strongest. Good luck.
joanie
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Beanie Baby at 11:52 on 07 October 2005
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Thank you all so very much for your support and feedback. I did not expect my moment of raw emotion to attract so much interest. Raw emotion is something I usually only reserve for my poetry! Things are already looking up. Have a massive interview booked for next Wednesday so keep your fingers crossed. If it comes off it could be the most significent achievement in my entire literary career! I won't say anything else until I know the outcome. In the meantime, I agree that the last line comes over as trite (thank you, Laura)but at the moment of writing it I was feeling wholly crushed and beaten! Not any more though. Nik has also hit the nail on the head for I too believe that every setback is also a new opportunity and it is that philosophy that has kept me going. You are all darlings and I am so grateful to you all for just being there. Isn't Writewords a wonderful thing? I'd have been lost without it -especially lately!
Beanie xx
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Nik Perring at 11:55 on 07 October 2005
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Glad you're a bit chirpier, Beanie.
Best of luck for Wednesday, Fingers, legs and eyes crossed for you.
And by the way, I don't think the last line's trite at all. I liked its honesty. Just my opinion though.
Cheers,
Nik. ;)
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Barlow at 17:24 on 19 October 2005
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Beanie,
Thanks for sharing your feelings so powerfully at a time when emotions are very close to the surface. These lines are so effective; I keep rereading them to see if there are any more hidden depths. Ending each line with a full stop seems to me to emphasise your determination and it is really encouraging that you are being so positive at such a difficult time in your life.
Hope the interview went well (was it today or last Wednesday?)
Use writing to work through what is happening and make some sort of sense of it all. (Or just write down what you think of your former employers!)
Keep writing whatever else happens. You are such a source of inspiration and encouragement to the members of this group.
All good wishes,
Barlow
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Beanie Baby at 21:16 on 19 October 2005
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Barlow, that is so sweet! Thank you so very much. I am glad you think my comments are helpful. Bottom line is that poetry is my entire life. I love it with every heart beat. I often try other forms of writing but the poetry is always, without fail, what I come back to and reading it has a very physical, as well as spiritual, effect on me. Sometimes I read one and I feel like I might faint because the words are so powerful. Even more powerful is what lies beneath the words. I simply cannot describe my love for it adequately which is why, I guess, it is sometimes, such a mystery to people!
Thank you for your good wishes for the interview. It was for an Editorial/Marketing Officer at The Poetry Book Society and took place last Wednesday. Despite the fact I'd been shortlisted, the job went to someone else, but I will keep at it. Something will turn up; I just know it.
Bless you.
Beanie x
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