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Shower Haiku

by joanie 

Posted: 01 October 2005
Word Count: 12
Summary: A reflection on looking out today; I am not very productive just now!
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soon blue sky shrouds with
a thousand silver needles
piercing autumn's gilt






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Laura Hunt at 20:59 on 01 October 2005  Report this post
The silver /gold contrast always amazes me; it's as stark as black/white, but somehow unreal. I can't find the words to explain it - but you have. As long as you're looking out you're seeing things!
Thanks for sharing this.
Laura Hunt
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joanie at 09:26 on 02 October 2005  Report this post
Thanks, Laura!

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Shika at 21:58 on 02 October 2005  Report this post
What a sharp eye you have. I love the image. S
Read the WriteWords interview with Emmanuella Dekonor (Shika)
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joanie at 07:17 on 03 October 2005  Report this post
Many thanks, Shika!

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Barlow at 09:23 on 03 October 2005  Report this post
Very evocative image captured in so few words.
Keep observing and writing!
Barlow
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joanie at 09:29 on 03 October 2005  Report this post
Thank you Barlow. I will!

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Nik Perring at 00:04 on 04 October 2005  Report this post
"a thousand silver needles piercing"

Yes, yes and yes again. Beautiful. Lovely. Evocative. Visual. Delicate.

Fab.

Nik.
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joanie at 07:01 on 04 October 2005  Report this post
Thanks, Nik!

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Beanie Baby at 22:16 on 13 October 2005  Report this post
Oh, Joanie, this is perfect - just perfect. I read it aloud twice and felt something deep in my heart. If you can come up with something as wonderful as this when you are not being very productive, then how good will your poetry be when you are being productive. Eleven out of ten for this. It is truly beautiful.
Beanie x
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joanie at 22:52 on 13 October 2005  Report this post
Beanie, thank you so much. What a lovely response! Glad you liked it.

joanie
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