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Sunday

by shaunsouthern 

Posted: 27 July 2003
Word Count: 53
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All last nights complications
Played out in the sun
Here there everywhere
Laughing having fun
Lost in time and thoughts and
Believing what we say
Clear and cloudless wide sky
Hopeful sunny day
And when the light is fading
Hearts are still in flame
Sunday rest and relaxation
Life is still a game







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Ellenna at 17:16 on 27 July 2003  Report this post
I love it!.... the first two lines are brilliant..

such a good feeling with your poetry... and thats what i go on the feel of things not the technical stuff ! great

Ellie
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paul53 [for I am he] at 19:45 on 20 March 2005  Report this post
typo: last night's
Try redrafting this, maybe without the rhyme; concentrate more on expressing yourself - there's a good poem somewhere in this.
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