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august
Posted: 27 July 2005
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august
cider-apple scent, acrid, overpowering
drifts in the hot, still air
the long afternoon dozes.
we sip summer through straws
and fist jam sandwiches of soft white bread
we freeze time in cubes,
clink it in glasses of weak orange squash
let it melt on the tongue
the earth dries, bleaching colour from grass and hedges
the factory drones beyond the orchard
close at hand
there are bees.
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 Cornelia at 22:03 on 27 July 2005
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Very evocative. My only query - 'fist' sandwiches? It's so lovely that I hate to be picky.
Sheila
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 Ticonderoga at 14:17 on 28 July 2005
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Yes, extremely redolent and atmospheric, but I wondered about the fisting, too! If you mean stuffing into the mouth, quite another image is what comes to mind, I'm afraid! But, lovely piece (if you're Scots, that's a wee joke).
Best,
Mike
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Souchong at 15:21 on 28 July 2005
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thanks guys for your comments. it's been an education.
the search engine yielded clues to a meaning quite different from the one i had envisaged .... am blushing as i type ...
souchong
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Felmagre at 16:48 on 28 July 2005
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Strangly, I thought you meant 'first jam sandwishes' meaning the fist sndwishes made from the seasons jam...see how we all read different things into the image.
irrespective you have evoked an image of lazy summer days...
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Thank you for the image.
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Souchong at 22:02 on 29 July 2005
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thanks felicity
i will have to think about this one, i think ...
souchong
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 joanie at 07:15 on 30 July 2005
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Hi Souchong. This is lazily atmospheric; I can feel it. I particularly like the last references to the sounds - the comparison of the droning factory and the bees.
Lovely. joanie
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 Elsie at 15:56 on 31 July 2005
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Souchong - so evocative, for me particularly the weak orange squash - so true, and the clever placing of the factory and the bees. Those summers when we were kids..thanks.
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Elsie at 15:56 on 31 July 2005
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Souchong - so evocative, for me particularly the weak orange squash - so true, and the clever placing of the factory and the bees. Those summers when we were kids..thanks.
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