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Exsistence

by hailfabio 

Posted: 25 July 2005
Word Count: 15
Summary: Things I've thought about since I was a child, about why matter exsists at all. The possibility of nothingness, no contrast. The realisation of this civilisation we've built and the psychological constraints we have.
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Dieticians tame us.
Politicians blame us.
Sitting on the same bus,
thinking of the Universe.






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joanie at 10:57 on 25 July 2005  Report this post
Stephen, I like it! Only 15 words but hours of thought and discussion could result from them. A good one to repeat and ponder on.

joanie
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hailfabio at 11:08 on 25 July 2005  Report this post
Thanks joinie,

Wasn't if universe went, but I think it does. Also wasn't sure about 'dieticians' or 'corporations'...

Stephen
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joanie at 11:11 on 25 July 2005  Report this post
I like 'dieticians' as an opening!

joanie
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jewelsx at 16:35 on 25 July 2005  Report this post
I am with joanie 'dieticians' as an opening works fab.
I loved this - so simple yet put together so well.
Brilliant stuff as ever,
all the best.
Jules
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hailfabio at 11:15 on 28 July 2005  Report this post
Thanks Jules.

Enjoyed coming up with this one.

Stephen
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Account Closed at 09:00 on 29 July 2005  Report this post
Love it! Just wondered if there should be a comma after the 3rd line instead of a full-stop, as I read them in my mind as being together?

LoL

A
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hailfabio at 10:49 on 29 July 2005  Report this post
Yes, think you're right.

thanks
Stephen
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