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Piece Of Mind

by Zettel 

Posted: 15 July 2005
Word Count: 52

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Piece Of Mind

Winter seeps
into the
The heart

Spring blossom
dies to
The earth

Life roots
in the
The sun
rains Summer

Light and rain
The leaves

Earth sleeps
Winter seeps
the heart

The heart

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Ticonderoga at 17:18 on 15 July 2005  Report this post
Very lovely indeed.


joanie at 20:51 on 15 July 2005  Report this post
Mmmm...., Zettel, beautiful. The form is lovely, with the repeated idea in each stanza. It warrants several reads!


Zettel at 10:31 on 16 July 2005  Report this post
Thanks Joannie and Ti

felt the need for a little simplicity in a very complicated week.



James Graham at 11:09 on 16 July 2005  Report this post
Having just read your article in the Journalism Group, it seems to me this poem - in a different way from the last one you posted - is all of a piece with it. But this does what a poem can do but an article not so well - abstract the emotions and express them in a universal vocabulary, such as the vocabulary of the seasons. By forming a kind of linked chain of images that move through the cycle of seasons, the poem conveys a sense of the harmony of things. At least, if instead of looking at the world situation we look in another direction for a moment, we can feel that harmony is possible.


Zettel at 23:49 on 16 July 2005  Report this post
Yes indeed James. You have an unerring eye for cnonections. Logic, reason and sanity only get you so far.. I don't know whether you like movies - if you do I would highly recommend Jean-Luc Godard's latest 'Notre Musique' of which I have posted a review. I believe the central theme of NM is the the relationship between the scientific truth of empirical fact and perception; and the artistic truth of the spirit and imagination. His view seems to be that in intractable conflicts - in the case of NM, the Palestine/Israeli conflict, only an element of artistic imagination and human empathy can break a deadlock.

Thanks far the as ever, perceptive comment.



engldolph at 17:45 on 17 July 2005  Report this post
HI Z -

Yes, I liked the effortless flow and the way you capture the cycle of life/feelings/the heart ... effectively constructed with the last word repeated in the next stanza without feeling too laboured..

I might think of knocking off the last two lines... for me it stopped its continuance as a cycle..that is, the last line linking back to the first line of the poem..

perhaps use The heart remembers as the title ...piece of mind doesn't really add much for me..


Zettel at 00:13 on 18 July 2005  Report this post
Thanks Mike.

It seemed such a scrap of thought that the pun of the title sort of seemed appropriate to me.

The last two lines are intended to express the idea that what gives a sense of continuity and repetition of the seasonal cycle of life is its recognition and remembrance by the human mind and heart. This for me, is why we feel comforted and anticipatory about the Spring to come and accepting of the inevitable return to Winter.

That's a lot of philosophy to hang on 3 words but for the intention of the poem they need to be there. Though I accept of course that they might not work.

Thanks for the comments. It is important to find out how things strike others, especially those who writegood stuff themselves.


Ambitions of Lisa at 12:21 on 18 July 2005  Report this post
This is so beautiful and creates strong images for me.

Something I could read again and again.


Zettel at 14:19 on 18 July 2005  Report this post
Thanks Lisa

Very satisfying and encouraging.



The Walrus at 18:50 on 19 July 2005  Report this post
Seamless piece Zettel.



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