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Nothing and Something
Posted: 19 July 2003
Word Count: 66
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Why did the universe begin?
How did it?
How could something come from nothing?
Perhaps there was NEVER nothing
To know nothing is there you have to have existence to realise its not there
And if something exists to know it not there then something exists
And so there can never be nothing
To have nothing you need something
And with something you can’t have nothing
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 poemsgalore at 13:01 on 20 July 2003
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This is very deep and thoughtful Scott, don't quite know what it is about but I liked the way it is constructed with spaces between the lines - leaving space to think about what you have just read - or was that just accidental?
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bluesky3d at 21:25 on 20 July 2003
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Scott
There is a difference between 0 and 1
the same as the difference between no and yes
and certainly 'no' is something and not nothing
and 0 is a very important something
and certainly not a nothing
and one cannot say there was never nothing
if one says that nothing is something
so there has always been something
so the answer is yes not no
phew, I agree !
but maybe others beg to differ? lol
A :o)
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Scott at 21:08 on 21 July 2003
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Thanks for the feedback, I spent a lot of time trying to figure out the impossible in life and myself and somewhere in that deep assessment this emerged, I was in the car when it sprang to mind and I actually pulled over to write it down.
Glad you liked it
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Adam at 18:11 on 26 July 2003
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Scott,
I really like the vicious circle-effect that this poem evokes, nicely created through a finely-balanced juxtaposition of nothing and something. It seems to express the eternal quandry of human existence, as well as the antithetical relationships between words and the meaning of language, in a cleverly prosaic style.
I should suggest, however, that a couple of the lines need to be slightly revised so that they scan better. I realise that the poem is intentionally confusing, but you don't want to lose the meaning in a web of contradictions and apparent evasions (e.g. 'And if something exists to know it not there then something exists'). Also, although I very much like the sense of repetition and lack of a denouement, I think that the lines need to develop as opposed to merely rephrase (perhaps an image, word play, internal rhyme, break in rhythm, or something?) I am, however, splitting hairs, as the poem, I feel, only needs one or two small alterations to strengthen it and to better convey the thoughts behind the initial vision.
I think, in terms of subject at least, that you and I are very similar poets. If you get a chance, I should very much like you to read some of my poetry and to offer your constructive criticism.
Anyway, well done - a fascinating conceptual poem. I hope to hear from you again shortly...
Take care,
Adam
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roger at 15:59 on 25 August 2003
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Hi Scott,
You've made my brain hurt with this...I'm completely bemused. But I liked it.
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