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Defiance

by Ambitions of Lisa 

Posted: 11 July 2005
Word Count: 25
Summary: Simple, to the point and defiant against acts of terrorism following the London Bombings 7 July 2005. All comments welcome.
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Civility will not be destroyed
By inhumane cowards who hide
Pathetically in this world
Daring not to show their faces
To the societies they despise






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joanie at 17:11 on 11 July 2005  Report this post
Hi Lisa, I like the positive first line, echoing the title. I also like the slant-rhymes: hide, despise; destroyed, world; daring, faces. (I hope I've got the right definition there!)

I would prefer to see lower case all through rather than the capitals at the start of the lines, but that's personal.

This comes across as a quiet but strong statement of fact. Very confident.

joanie
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Ambitions of Lisa at 12:11 on 18 July 2005  Report this post
Thanks Joanie,
Yes, I was hoping it would come across as being strong and positive with a little anger thrown in there as well.

:)
Lisa
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