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Timeghosts

by bluesky3d 

Posted: 18 July 2003
Word Count: 306
Summary: Part 4 Writing exercise


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From a child to a man, from a man to a child, ghosts have haunted this space as dreams.

Washings will not remove them, neither even when the bed is renewed will they go. The frame has changed and the mattress too, yet each has inherited Timeghosts, in the part that lies beneath unseen. Like junk DNA, what use are they?

They occupy the frame and lie in the space within. They move alongside me. They surround me in the deep but only surface briefly, as monsters lurking, to leave a wake that disappears on waking.

Each bead of sweat absorbed, each tear permeated into the pillow adds one more drop of memory to its repository.

They travel with me, as memories travel unseen over generations.

Words, ideas, images, symbols, archetypes, distorted recollections of events that manifest themselves collectively within the ocean that surrounds as weird and wonderful creatures living within the depths of this unconscious sea.

Near the surface they are familiar. Some are even friendly. Some glide like sharks scavenging at will, some even briefly bask upon rocks. But in the dark below lie the bizarre, those that leave no mark and make no sound other than the clicking of strange electricity. Water snakes, manta rays and eels, some designed by God on an ‘off-day’ lie in shadows or under the sand to grab or stun others passing near. Black holes that manifest themselves only by any absence of life, all sucked up. What use are they to man or beast?

Yet some are beautiful. They glide effortlessly within the debris of shipwrecks, within the coral reefs and seaweed undergrowth; fantastic imaginings, wondrous luminescent shapes that swim in shoals and move together as one, communicating by ESP; and those with iridescent colours, sheer artistry.

Even sometimes mermaids tempt and with their teasing tricks seduce.






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Jabulani at 10:39 on 21 July 2003  Report this post
I love your imagery of the unconscious sea and it weird and wonderful creatures. This really brings something intangible to life.
Laura.

Anna Reynolds at 20:44 on 21 July 2003  Report this post
The poetic, vivid imagery of this really works. And the sense of each bead of sweat, each tear is lovely- really bringing together a lot of the deep threads and echoes of history from other beds, maybe even all beds- a kind of universal bed... Lovely. I'm pleased you've made this feel quite stream of conciousness but there's a framework underneath it- and that final image is great- leaving us with the mermaids. Excellent.

bluesky3d at 15:32 on 22 July 2003  Report this post
Laura and Anna,
thank you.

What I took from the way you (Anna) described the task was the idea of a word 'painting'.

Using the metaphor of a sea of dreams, inhabited by these strange looking Timeghosts, the creatures of the shallows and the weirder creatures of the deep.

I suppose there are analagies when we say someone is 'in deep', we can mean both in deep sleep, or in the depths, literally. Conversely we talk of shallow sleep.

The first exercise gave me the concept of ghosts and the last one the sea.

It might make a good poem, and I thought I'd have a go and turn it into one maybe, just to see?

Thanks again Anna for your guidance.

Andrew
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