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The Fisher Queen

by John G.Hall 

Posted: 25 June 2005
Word Count: 32
Summary: Yes, there are Queenfishers.
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The Fisher Queen

a blue nerve of flight

feeds from a river's mind
a fisher queens thought,

fired by spring's synapse
into bright summering air,

here nature thinks in bird.


John G.Hall






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Account Closed at 10:22 on 01 July 2005  Report this post
A wonderful picture of a moment in time - very effective. I would put back the apostrophes - please!! - but leave out the last full stop. I'm also tempted to make the last line a stand-alone line for added punch. I'm afraid I also don't like the title. I suggest it doesn't actually need a title and would breathe freer without one.

Great stuff.

LoL

A
xxx

PS And why a capital "Q"??

:))
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