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A vehicle for my desire (development)
Posted: 17 July 2003
Word Count: 98
Summary: second attempt at the third exercise - a fantasy bed
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Together, we embark upon a journey of discovery, you and I, a vehicle for my desire.
Over the sea and through a cloudless sky, through the brightest day, and star-filled heavens, effortlessly we fly.
We pass through unimagined beauty, to discover a land of dreams.
Of secret mysteries, knights and ladies in crinoline, wizards, witches, serpents and dragons; a distant past where we may roam at will, or a future where every wish is granted, and every hope fulfilled.
We drift together on a voyage upon a tranquil ocean, where I meet my queen and together we lie.
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 Anna Reynolds at 15:57 on 17 July 2003
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Andrew- this feels much cleaner to me now. And the sense of the bed being the central second character is really nice, using it as a vehicle to the fantasy land works very well. Excellent! I still think even one tiny part of these dreams could be a story each- which is part of the point of the exercise of course.
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 bluesky3d at 16:04 on 17 July 2003
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yes Anna
it puts the phrase 'bed time stories' in a new light.
I was tempted to tell one, but resisted, preferring to leave it between the lines, or perhaps what one might term 'under the counter slip'? (::::: groans at bad pun)
Andrew :o)
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bluesky3d at 17:05 on 17 July 2003
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This would be turning into the 'story' I didnt want to tell.. bit too smaltzy, sorry for that, but at least its 100 words spot on... ;o)
Together, we embark upon a journey of discovery, you and I, a vehicle for my desire.
From the folds in the sheets we fly over the sea and through a cloudless sky, to a land of dreams, a distant past where we may roam at will, or a future where every wish is granted, and every hope fulfilled.
We drift together on our voyage upon a tranquil ocean, to an island where I will meet my queen and together we lie, waiting for daylight. And what would my wish be? That when I wake, to find you lying there, still.
A :o)
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