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Two red roses
Posted: 10 June 2005 Word Count: 87
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Plastic roses never fade, Never will their petals fall, Never reach out to the light And cannot grow at all. But I keep them by my bedside Just in case the memories fail... Two red roses that survived To tell the bitter tale.
Two red roses from a dozen Given by my Valentine; Do they signify forever? Plastic lasts a long, long time. Though not precious like the real thing They can still be torn apart. Ten red roses lay there shredded... Lay there with my heart.
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Epona Love at 23:30 on 10 June 2005
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Hello again. Unfortunatly I haven't had much time to visit recently ... I've been busy writing.... assignments rather than poetry I'm afraid. Hopefully I'll have more time to catch up with your poems over the next couple of months.
Emma x.
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paul53 [for I am he] at 11:07 on 11 June 2005
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Emma,
Well, to start off, I like this. The plastic roses reminded me of being hard up when first married; celebrating anniversaries with tacky pomagne and a cheap, saccharine cake.
Moving on to romance, and chivalry, and soul-mates, and all those wonderful things that fill our dreams, I find it hard to comment now as I am reaching that age when the hormones have ceased to surge like a stormy sea. I am left by a placid lake wondering what liking, loving, longing, desire, and all those other heady emotions were really all about.
It seems the only thing that lasts these days is the pain of it all.
Paul
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Ticonderoga at 14:51 on 11 June 2005
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Heartbreaking, thought-provoking and written with superb control of language and imagery. I hope people don't misunderstand me when I say this, as it's meant as a great compliment, but, this would be a perfect anthology piece - to stumble across a gem like this abd have it linger with you always is one of the joys of anthology browsing. Terrific poem.
Best,
Mike
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joanie at 17:41 on 11 June 2005
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Hi Emma. This is very sad and poignant. I like the rhymes and especially the last line.
I agree with Mike; I love flicking through anthologies and returning again and again to favourites.
I enjoyed this.
typo: 'shredded' (?)
joanie
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Mr B. at 10:06 on 12 June 2005
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I like the way something naff, like plastic roses, is given a special quality - plastic lasting for ever, like love, going on to serve as a reminder of the tarnishing of that love. Nicely done!
Cheers,
Anthony
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gard at 19:07 on 17 August 2005
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HI epona
I like this. Nice subject material nicely rhymed and short enough to have an impact.
G
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blp at 17:34 on 20 September 2005
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It's not my kind of thing, but it's beautifully crafted and the rhyme, meter and imagery keep it well away from being mawkish.
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