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Blind Date

by Jubbly 

Posted: 07 June 2005
Word Count: 333
Summary: For the Flash 50 challenge.


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"It’s lovely to meet you,” he said, his eyes admiring his mystery date.

I smiled and blushed rose pink.

"Champagne? To toast our luck."

"Sure, why not?"

There was real warmth to this one, the laughter lines bracketing his mouth seemed to invite a smile from anyone he came in contact with.

"I was with my ex for five years but she left me for someone else."

He looked down momentarily, politeness not allowing him to mourn for any longer than necessary.

"Oh well, them’s the breaks, huh?"

As he tipped his glass towards mine and the goblets chinked like a clichéd soundtrack to love, I began to have second thoughts.

"I want children some day, I come from a big family, in fact I'm the only one who's not hitched with little ones in tow."

"I'm an only child." I managed.

As the evening wore on, I realised he was a very nice man, kind, genuine, not afraid to show his feelings, caring and not at all bad looking.

"So," he said, rubbing his hands together, excited at the prospect of what this date might mean. "Shall we grab a bite to eat, I know a little Italian round the corner, does a brilliant risotto, what do you say?"

My tummy rumbled and said yes that would be great, my instincts told me what a good idea this potential partnership was, but my obstinate defiant beating heart put on it's party pooper hat.

Too nice, it whispered, too dull, he’s already had his heart broken once, his heart is weak but I am strong, when two hearts joust, I will not be knocked off my steed. There’s no danger here, only safe boredom , the one thing you constantly fear.

So I say to myself, don't break the habit of a lifetime girl, go on, go find yourself a bastard.

And unused to disregarding my heart's desire, I shake my head, feign tiredness and leave that lovely man all on his own.






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Al T at 11:29 on 07 June 2005  Report this post
Very well observed, Julie. But haven't you noticed how the biggest bastards are the ones who pretend to be nice...

Adele.

Jubbly at 11:48 on 07 June 2005  Report this post
Quite so Adele, but they don't pretend for very long eh? Thanks for reading.

J
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Nik Perring at 11:58 on 07 June 2005  Report this post
Great writing again Jubbly. I thought this was so, so sad. I think her biggest fear should be knowing that she will inevitably make the wrong decision when it comes to love. Interesting when you look at the fact that the thing she says she does fear is "safe."

Poor things.

Loved the jousting hearts line.

Cheers,
Nik.

Al T at 11:59 on 07 June 2005  Report this post
I'm sure the most accomplished ones are never found out. I have a very good (platonic) male friend who gets away with murder in his relationships, and watching him is always instructive. A little charm can go a very long way...

Sue H at 12:39 on 07 June 2005  Report this post
Sad, yes, but I have to say I agree with her. A life of safe boredom doesn't really appeal. But there are warning signs - his wife left him for someone else after 5 year; he's the only one in his large family without kids. Either's he's a secret psycho or he is so achingly dull that no one stays round him for long. I'm glad she didn't bother with him!! Great story.

Sue


Dreamer at 12:42 on 07 June 2005  Report this post
Very good commentary on human nature. Nicely written, if a bit sad.

I have seen this time and again. A woman finally escapes a relationship with an abusive husband (let’s say) and promptly finds another cut from the same cloth. Same thing applies with cheating bums etc…

Are we simply attracted to the same things or are we subconsciously looking to replace the relationship we lost as it is all we know?

Brian.



bjlangley at 12:47 on 07 June 2005  Report this post
Hi Julie, I like the dialogue in this, very fitting for a first date - even that stays safe. The conflict in her, trying not to go with the instinct of the heart is well delivered.

All the best,

Ben

Dee at 19:28 on 07 June 2005  Report this post
Nice one, Julie. Very perceptive tale.

During the dialogue section I was often unsure who was speaking. Otherwise, a very enjoyable story.

Dee


Account Closed at 19:57 on 07 June 2005  Report this post
Julie, I'm sure there's a lot of truth in this!

I got confused as to who was talking sometimes. Also, don't think you need the guy's POV in the first sentence: "his eyes admiring his mystery date." Better to just tell her side of the story.

"my obstinate defiant beating heart" - too many adjectives here? "put on it's party pooper hat." = its

A tragic tale - haven't you written something else with the same title?

Elspeth


crowspark at 22:45 on 07 June 2005  Report this post
I enjoyed this Julie - a gentle sad feel to it.

I liked, "Too nice, it whispered, too dull, he’s already had his heart broken once, his heart is weak but I am strong, when two hearts joust, I will not be knocked off my steed. There’s no danger here, only safe boredom , the one thing you constantly fear."

I nice sense of doomed world weariness - of burnt fingers wabbling back to the fire (or something like that.)

Bill

scottwil at 08:24 on 08 June 2005  Report this post
Wonderful writing, Julie. Great dialogue and description: "the goblets chinked like a clichéd soundtrack to love,".
Do serial daters of bastards ever have this level of self-awareness? If so, a tragic tale indeed.

Best
Sion

Jubbly at 09:00 on 08 June 2005  Report this post
Thankyou everyone who has commented on this. I had an idea that the two people sort of crossed over as they are both lonely and looking for something but if it's really unclear and bothers readers I'll sort it out.

Cheers

Julie
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lieslj at 18:59 on 08 June 2005  Report this post
Oh my word, Julie. I didn't see that ending coming. Not at all. I'm wondering if there is a way to anticipate it that wont give the game away, but that will make for a smoother segue to the unexpected.

Liesl



Anj at 21:39 on 12 June 2005  Report this post
Julie,

As soon as she used the word "nice" about him I knew he was dead in the water, but the great writing that followed meant the ending still had real impact.

Like others, I especially loved the two hearts jousting - fab line.

Andrea

ShayBoston at 12:38 on 26 June 2005  Report this post
Hi Jubbly,

An excellent portrait of why nice guys always come last. Well usually. Love the 'defiant beating heart put on it's party pooper hat'.

Shay


Esther Frances at 16:15 on 25 March 2006  Report this post
I loved this - it just made me smile and I laughed out loud when I got to "So I say to myself, don't break the habit of a lifetime girl, go on, go find yourself a bastard" - I think there is a break for nice guys. It happens when your biological clock clicks to a halt - when we're young survival of the fittest along with the biological clock means testosterone, power, strength - great genes and great jeans! After reproduction gradually bows out, our sense returns - that's when the nice guy reaps all his rewards I guess. He finds a fellow soon-to-be gardener and they buy a home in France - lovely, eh? Esther Frances.


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