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by  Nibles

Posted: Sunday, December 7, 2003
Word Count: 365
Summary: Trying to start a book. The first paragraph is just something I wrote that I will stick into the story, and the outline is just my ideas of what the story might be. Could use some help brainstorming, must find someway to make it interesting by adding some conflicts and obstacles.

Her eyes would squint when she smiled, as a sun might flush at moonlight. As he looked into her eyes he could sense her distance--they had not been in such a situation before. She lay in the center of the bed, garnished in lingerie and the orange glow of forty-watts. Hovering above her, he accepting her pout lip which proceeded like a glistening lolly, shimmering in the dim light of the lamp, in all its wondrous glory. To embrace one another at last, mocked the placement of ice in hot water. The ice would toss about the water in a reluctant and crackling frenzy--under the heat which to it was intense--before slowly uniting at last. He nestled his head amongst her breasts as she brushed her hand through his hair. They lay there naked and enjoyed the moment. After breathing a sigh of relief, he broke the silence and for the first time expressed the feelings he had for her. She did not respond. He titled his head back slightly--disturbing her breast--intent on looking at her, though hesitated and returned his head to its nest. His eyes stared across the room in an embarrassed confusion, not knowing why her mouth spoke silence. Her body moved, and her throat echoed a moan. He realized why she did not speak. She was asleep.

Theme: There are those who go after what they want, and those who don’t.
Time Span: Year, few years, not very long.
James - Goes after what he wants, because he doesn’t happen to get it.
Darla - Doesn’t go after what she wants, she just happens to get it.
1. Start out in a small town.
a. She saves him from the rapid river, trying to get cliff flower.
b. He begins to like her.
c. Discovers she likes flowers.
d. He sends her flowers.
e. She finds out it’s from him. They’re shitty flowers w/roots.
f. She’s a bit frightened.
g. He tries to be with her as much as he can.
h. She gets annoyed.
i. Their differences revealed.
j. Discovers desire is to have the flower on the top of the cliff.
k. His desire is to have her.