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Revelation

by  joanie

Posted: Tuesday, October 2, 2007
Word Count: 55




Version II
She trusted
his expertise,
his confident aplomb.

Assured by
such calmness
she fell at his feet,

until the
nineteenth spreadsheet
appeared. Then she left....


Version I
She trusted
his expertise,
his confident aplomb.

His calmness
assured her so
she fell at his feet.

With a flash
of something like
gut reaction, she left....