Monsoon
by Felmagre
Posted: Sunday, February 26, 2006 Word Count: 72 |
Gently at first then a deluge
As clouds emptied greyness
On the heads of unsuspecting folk
Leaving murky puddles;
Riots of colour, freshness, new life.
Summer’s monsoon warmth
Evaporates all moisture;
Pools, lakes disappear.
*(a)Disappointing promises displayed;
Only past impressions left.
Earth’s crust cracked like dried-out skin.
Fossilised etchings.
* (b)Natures unending renewal.
*Amended - now reads
(a)Life's disappointingly short
(b)witness nature's silent stirrings.
I wonder if this reads a little better?
As clouds emptied greyness
On the heads of unsuspecting folk
Leaving murky puddles;
Riots of colour, freshness, new life.
Summer’s monsoon warmth
Evaporates all moisture;
Pools, lakes disappear.
*(a)Disappointing promises displayed;
Only past impressions left.
Earth’s crust cracked like dried-out skin.
Fossilised etchings.
* (b)Natures unending renewal.
*Amended - now reads
(a)Life's disappointingly short
(b)witness nature's silent stirrings.
I wonder if this reads a little better?