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This could only be a poem

Posted: 26 July 2008
Word Count: 33

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because the story slipped away but
something breathed still.
The subconscious, an angler
netted it up.
Dredged into the shallows
an unexpected trawl,
unconscious haul
lies hard and gleaming
caught in the web

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Posted by : joanie at 22:55 on 28 July 2008

Hi Kirsty. I love this! I do like the idea that a poem is caught like a fish, with the continued metaphor here! I think that the opening 'because' should not have a capital letter because it flows better from the title. What do you think?

joanie

Posted by : FelixBenson at 23:39 on 28 July 2008

Thanks Joanie!
I think you are dead right about the capitalisation. I have changed it... Thanks for the help. ;-)
Cheers, Kirsty

Posted by : Katerina at 07:55 on 29 July 2008

I love this - the idea that the story slipped away but there was something left, and likening it to an angler is great.

Kat x

Posted by : V`yonne at 15:08 on 03 August 2008

Quite often that is how a poem is born. Well exdpressed here too. Loved the fishing for ideas/ plot.

Posted by : Beanie Baby at 22:22 on 05 August 2008

Really like this. It flows so well (no pun intended) and leaves you wondering about others that 'got away' - just like the fish!
Beanie

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