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Goodbye

by Brian Aird 

Posted: 20 July 2006
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Don't ask why; I have no reasons why
for dying is to die as falling is to fly
and going is to gone as now is to on
and on and on and bloody on
the streets red and sirens calling
not just for an end but a new beginning
my soul cries
for dying is to die as falling is to fly
and all my hellos turn to one goodbye








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NinaLara at 12:23 on 20 July 2006  Report this post
Dear Brain - I really like this for its intense opening. This whole section has something very special about it:

Don't ask why; I have no reasons why
for dying is to die as falling is to fly
and going is to gone as now is to on
and on and on and bloody on
the streets red and sirens calling


It is real and captures the meaninglessness of death and life. The on and on and bloody on are the calling of the sirens before they arrive.
I think the rest of the poem looses its way a little - perhaps because it is impossible to maintain the intensity of the first part.

Perhaps this could be a voice in a slightly longer narrative poem? Or maybe it could be a very tight short explosion in insight.

joanie at 14:19 on 22 July 2006  Report this post
Hi Brian.

I keep coming back to re-read this; the whole feel of it has a sense of the circular, constant, often senseless round of things, which we struggle to get our head round. It sounds good read aloud - I like the rhyme of the opening and closing phrases, in addition to the end rhymes. I have just read it aloud again - yes, it's good!

joanie


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