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Nadir

by LONGJON 

Posted: 04 August 2003
Word Count: 16
Summary: Haiku - 'cause its not all cherry blossoms and sunsets.
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Your harsh words chill me
Have I laid in stores of love
That will rot unused






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Ioannou at 13:56 on 07 August 2003  Report this post
Remembering back to Haiku lessons at school, I remember that the aim was to write a twist into the last line - something unexpected. So maybe the last two lines need to be changed around somewhat? Not sure. Love, Maria.
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