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My Cat and Shostakovich

by Brian Aird 

Posted: 26 October 2005
Word Count: 103


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Softly she purrs
slowly the music builds
inside I feel the composers anguish
yet softly I stroke her fur
the room is full of violins and passion
she turns and licks my hand
crashing cymbals stir the air
a crescendo breaks free
I feel her claws gently prick my skin
a poignant piano is heard in the now still air
my eyes moisten
I feel as if I'm flying with the music,
above the world of care.
She shakes her head and looks at me
her green eyes questioning.
Without warning she leaps for the cat flap
and enters the cold outside air.






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Clairebear at 14:33 on 26 October 2005  Report this post
Brilliant! Captures a cat's aloofness perfectly.

paul53 [for I am he] at 16:10 on 26 October 2005  Report this post
Nice piece. I found my Oriental watching with interest a TV programme about Leopards last week.

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Sorry, pressed the wrong button there. I like poems with juxtapostion in them as it makes one look afresh at both the cat and the music.

Laura Hunt at 21:48 on 26 October 2005  Report this post
'inside I feel the composers anguish
yet softly I stoke her fur..'

How do we do this? - Sometimes I can't ... and the cat would be thrown off!

Laura



LONGJON at 22:07 on 26 October 2005  Report this post

Hello Brian,

Lovely associations here, physical touch with emotional touch.

May I make a few suggestions? Line 4 'stoke' - should be stroke?
Line 7 'symbols' - cymbals? Can see how it could be symbols but the association seems rather too distant.

How would it be if the last line read ' and enters the cold air outside'. Without wishing to sound pedantic it would seem to give greater finality? Possibly even try 'outside' on a line of its own?

Thinking again about this piece, I realised that it is the ease of identification with the situation that allowed me into this piece so completely.

Many thanks. much enjoyed.

John P.

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PS

Next time, you might like to try Barbers Adagio, or Chaussons Symphony in B flat minor, last movement, or Vivaldis Dei Gratia. Or failing that, just lay out some CDs on the floor and see which one the cat sits on!

Have fun.

JP

joanie at 14:16 on 29 October 2005  Report this post
Hi, Brian. I did enjoy this; you have captured the cat exactly. I love the music references. I was reading only yesterday that you can get a CD of a cat purring, to alleviate stress. Perhaps that's the answer; get it on CD then they can't just go off to do other things!

It's lovely.

joanie


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